Writing in Heat

I've writ this erotic scene, the first of two in this short story. I had to take it slow, building up the tension until he's about ready to and then she and finally...fizzle.

This is Character Development intercourse, which is like sex but with a lot more foreplay. In this case, it's important for the reader's understanding of the viewpoint character's mental situation.

Besides that, though, the tree spirit is a character in her own right (even if she's never the viewpoint character). I want to craft her motivations and then conceal them in ambiguous cluelets throughout the story for the careful reader. This scene sets off the first two and sets up the final two.

No, her name is not Ms. Tree.

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The Tree Spirit Story will be finished tomorrow. It's a pretty leisurely plot, but I haven't got in the zone with it. It's all for the good though, because it's a story that required a little real world research for me to be intellectually satisfied. I want to recruit a couple Alpha Readers to read this and the Gonzo Futurism story. Both will already have been sent out to markets when you read them, but they were experiments...

This girl isn't my tree spirit, but she could be?

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500 words? Yes
Short Story "Moving In, Moving On" - in progress (~2/3)